(This thing made me split the comment in two. So here is the rest of it.)
Just bringing up a couple of pages at random... Here
there's nothing particularly wrong with the dialogue, but I'd have found it easier to read if, instead of one large panel, you'd have divided the page into four panels. (This of course is getting dangerously close to me trying to tell you how to do your job which isn't something I'm qualified to say!) Otherwise I personally find mixed type-faces a bit difficult to keep track of - particularly when there's three or more on a page where one would do.Here
might be more of an example of what I'm trying to get at... The type-face for what the Japanese soldier's shouting is louder than his words. If, for example, he was speaking in a more "comic"-looking type-face; and, perhaps, lettered white on the black background; it might sparkle a bit more. Even leaving the words as is and just adding some comic-style emphasis - e.g.DON'T MOVE, AMERICAN!
SILVER BULLETS CAN KILL HUMANS JUST AS WELL AS IMMORTALS!
YOU'VE INTERRUPTED MY RAID, WEREWOLF.
(sorry, this isn't easy to do with basic HTML on a live journal comment...) But, basically, it's not garbage, and it wouldn't take much to give it some polish. And there's honestly nothing I can see wrong with the art on this page.
But the bottom line has to be: this is your
creative vision and it's not as if I'm either (1) disappointed with the story so far or (2) actually paying for it; and seeing as I can't draw at all and my writing is not much good (not to mention that I speak the local dialect of English which is rather different from American - I keep on having to explain myself to friends over the internet, although I think I'm getting better at keeping the weird ways of saying things out of my journal) it's really not my place to pick your comic to pieces. Just keep on drawing and writing it and I'll keep on reading it and, it looks most likely, enjoying it as well.