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Has it really been six weeks since last time? [Aug. 5th, 2007|07:25 pm]
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Must have been as I've got a bit of a backlog of web comic comments to think up. Plus a few that somehow got missed out the last couple of times. Only quick comments, unfortunately... I don't really have much in the way of brainpower left at the moment (too much work and all that).

Cat Legend has been a difficult comic to comment on... Despite having finally ploughed through its huge archive, I'm still not sure whether I even like it that much. Like the proverbial curate's egg, it's not perfect, but parts of it are excellent. Whether I'm prepared to plough through the chaotic story and uneven artistic style to get to the good parts is something I still haven't figured out.

I read the archive of Earthbound a good couple of months ago and it's now rather hazy in my memory. The main characters are demons, of the Western variety, and so far the story has just about managed to balance having unsympathetic characters as its protagonists without making them inappropriately cute-'n'-cuddly.

Girl Genius has just released another couple of hundred pages, which took quite a bit of getting through... the story's remained good, though, and there's a classic sequence beginning here which involves lots and lots of coffee. Plus mad science. Quite fun. Incidentally, meganbmoore, if you haven't had a look at this comic yet, you might find it moderately enjoyable.

I finally finished the Pointless archive. What I said before, still goes, and I must have been getting used to the art as it ended up not nearly as hard to live with. Definitely a story worth keeping an eye on.

Red Gate Society is another monster-hunter comic, with the monster-hunters in this case being monsters themselves, with their ringleader being a five-tailed kitsune from Japan (that's probably redundant, really...). This is another story still in its formative stages, with the total output so far being an introductory story and a couple of flashbacks. The characters and story are interesting enough, but the dialogue and artwork still being fairly average. As a few other comics I read started off with fairly basic artwork and improved over time ("Unshelved" and "Questionable Content" being two that spring readily to mind) I'm not giving up on the story... at least, not yet.

[User Picture]From: southerndave
2007-08-16 11:01 am (UTC)

Re: Critiques?

(This thing made me split the comment in two. So here is the rest of it.)

Just bringing up a couple of pages at random... Here there's nothing particularly wrong with the dialogue, but I'd have found it easier to read if, instead of one large panel, you'd have divided the page into four panels. (This of course is getting dangerously close to me trying to tell you how to do your job which isn't something I'm qualified to say!) Otherwise I personally find mixed type-faces a bit difficult to keep track of - particularly when there's three or more on a page where one would do.

Here might be more of an example of what I'm trying to get at... The type-face for what the Japanese soldier's shouting is louder than his words. If, for example, he was speaking in a more "comic"-looking type-face; and, perhaps, lettered white on the black background; it might sparkle a bit more. Even leaving the words as is and just adding some comic-style emphasis - e.g.


(sorry, this isn't easy to do with basic HTML on a live journal comment...) But, basically, it's not garbage, and it wouldn't take much to give it some polish. And there's honestly nothing I can see wrong with the art on this page.

But the bottom line has to be: this is your comic, your creative vision and it's not as if I'm either (1) disappointed with the story so far or (2) actually paying for it; and seeing as I can't draw at all and my writing is not much good (not to mention that I speak the local dialect of English which is rather different from American - I keep on having to explain myself to friends over the internet, although I think I'm getting better at keeping the weird ways of saying things out of my journal) it's really not my place to pick your comic to pieces. Just keep on drawing and writing it and I'll keep on reading it and, it looks most likely, enjoying it as well.
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